I really enjoyed reading this piece. It was raw and real and a breath of fresh air. What I find really interesting is that, while you are telling the story from the train, all of the memories flashing by remind me of the scenery flashing by the windows outside. It is almost as if the story itself is a train ride. I felt as if I was traveling from place to place, or memory to memory, with you. I think that helps the story do a really good job of coming full circle.
I also really enjoyed the concept of the "two." I believe that the idea of the two stems from the fact that pasts can be haunting. There is the real thing, what actually happened, and there is the ghost form of it, the memories it created. To me, the most impacting line was "we weren't talking, but this time-I think-we both felt anxiety in the quiet." While this sentence is easy to understand, I think that it holds a lot of importance. It is the point in the story where I recognized that things change and nothing is constant. I also think this sentence was the connection between the was and the is. It tied the two pieces together very nicely.
A question I have for you is, what was your inspiration for the story? Was it recent? What made you decide to write this specific piece at this specific time?
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